Re-writing: opinions grammar vids 3VD 2324

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Re-writing: Refining & Reformulating

Opinion Essays: Focus 4 grammar videos

These slides use text from your short opinion essays.  

what/ how/ why/ time

Most slides are set up like this. 

topic

The words outlined with a dotted line tell what can be improved in the text.

grammar

 In my opinion, grammar is best teached by teachers.

Click on the pink hotspots for explanations.

Hints

- Focus on underlined or italicized text

- There is a button for extra help once you start to answer

grammar

 In my opinion, grammar is best teached by teachers.

Click on the pink hotspots for explanations.

vocabulary

This will cost the teacher way less time.

vocabulary (accuracy)

It is not a good way of telling material.

Before today i didn’t know the book made videos 

but after watching one i only had more questions than answers.

Next you will improve the following opening sentence from an essay.

First try to improve it as a whole.

Then you will get the chance to work on it piece by piece.

Take a stab at improving the spelling, details, and grammar of the sentence. 

Before today i didn’t know the book made videos 

but after watching one i only had more questions than answers.

vocabulary (spelling)

Before today i didn’t know the book made videos 

but after watching one i only had more questions than answers.

accuracy: details

Before today I didn’t know the book made videos.

grammar: only

There are (atleast) two ways to improve the second clause.

Before today I didn’t know the book made videos, 

but after watching one I only had more questions than answers. 

grammar: coordinating clauses

Before today I didn’t know the book made videos, 

but after watching one I had more questions than answers.

Improve this introductory paragraph.

Everyone knows them, explanation videos. The ones that focus provides can be pretty useful, but I think the short animated video before is too distracting. I don’t think we should watch these videos

Everyone knows them, explanation videos. The ones that focus provides can be pretty useful, but I think the short animated video before is too distracting. I don’t think we should watch these videos

Everyone knows them: explanation videos. Those provided by Focus 4 can be pretty useful, yet for several reasons, I believe we shouldn’t watch them.

Colons are used to give emphasis.

:

When just the word 'focus' is used, it is unclear for the reader that this is something other than 'giving something attention'.

This was the topic of the first body paragraph. Instead of mentioning just one of the two reasons in the introduction, the writer could either 

1) mention both reasons, or

2) make the sentence more general like I did here. 

Before what? 

If this idea stays in, "...the short animated video before the explanation is too distracting."

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Improve this concluding paragraph.

All by all, the explanation was very clear because of the good voice and because of good examples given in the video.

Some hints....

All by all, the explanation was very clear because of the good voice and because of good examples given in the video.

All by all, the explanation was very clear because of the 

good voice and because of good examples given in the video.

All in all, the explanation was very clear due to the host’s intelligible voice and the variety of applicable examples given in the video.

The idiom is 'all in all'.

in

'Because of' is technically fine. 'Due to' just adds some variety.

The second 'because of' can be cut.

Whose voice? 

'Good' gives no information. What does it mean? Try to be as precise as possible when writing.

OO

Same here! By now you know a lot of adjectives you can use.

OO

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All in all, the explanation was very clear due to the host’s intelligible voice and the variety of applicable examples given in the video.

What is one thing
you learned from this activity?