- Don't use " I/we/you" in a formal essay -> Use "they", "people" or "it is or was said/believed/written etc."
The reason for not using personal pronouns (I/we/you) is that these weaken your arguments. Write in a neutral way.
- Add details to your sentences, by using adjectives & adverbs. For example: The man ran to the store. Revised (herschreven): Michael Johnson, a thirty-year-old man, quickly ran to the store.
Adding details makes sentences more interesting.
For example: This girl is my friend. She is in all my classes and I have invited her to my party. My party is on Saturday. (24 w.)
- Combine sentences into one longer sentence.
Revised: This girl, who is in all my classes, is my friend and I have invited her to my party on Saturday. (21 words)
In the revised sentence fewer words are used and the sentence is more natural and more interesting.
Avoid writing sentences with repetitive information, because the reader will be bored.